Seeing as no one has given me suggestions, i have written some more but it i still not finnished andI am still open for suggestions or examples.This is only an unfinished first draft.......
Jazzy is a can of coke, bursting toget out. Jazzy is popping crazy, then stops, then she burns. She is a sunshower followed by a rainbow. A ukelale, with only four strings. Jazzy is a picture book, lots to show you but little to say.
How do you like it? I think it's okaybut it needs to sound better and more lines. I'd love to here other peoples poems, pleeaaze!?
Ah well, have to go now, need food, neeeeeeeeeed dinner!
The lines went funny in my poem. ah well. do you like the picture of jazz?
ReplyDeleteJazz is a nice cake, you just can't get enough.
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